Monday, April 7, 2008
Thoughts about the class
I still enjoy the whole idea on having class on tuesday then doing blog assignments on thursdays. Though in my opinion, i would have class on some thursdays...especially when its around the time when a major paper is due. There will always be questions asked right before the paper's due. So, that thursdayy class could just be a questionare process. According to future 1050 students i would say depending on the teacher, they will have a lot of freedom towards their writing and just the right amount work load or they may have the complete opposite. Just stay on top of things and you'll be just fine!
April 22
I am done with all my other finals monday, april 21 so I am free to pick up portfolios whenever. Though i would like to meet sometime in the morning or early afternoon.
Thursday, April 3, 2008
Question 11: Assessment Activity
Once again, i will use my ethnography project for this question.
For this particular project, i used a lot of imagery features within my writing; and as I'm reading over my paper, i am realizing that i used the "-" quite frequently. Some examples would be, "Of course, there are those who just seem to pick an outfit out from the darkness of their closets – it’s like we’re heading back to the eighties or early nineties!", "Ironically, right next to this giddy group is the emo or scene type of kids. These particular geeks have one ear occupied with a headphone at all times. They cannot get enough of their metal, hardcore, or screamo –let’s slit our wrists types of music." or "Indeed band geeks have become a phenomenon within the educational habitat, but band geeks perform an impeccable talent that makes a bold statement – the beauty of music." Using so many hyphens i believe, helped my paper become more lively. The phrases following the hyphens allowed me to put in an extra two sense and to create a more vivid picture or to elaborate more on what im trying to explain, etc, etc.
I have some decent use of parallelism in my paper as well. For example, "In being a band geek, I have witnessed and have created my very own stereotypes towards my people." Using parallelism in my paper helps keep everything in order.
I have never really had that many problems with the use of pronouns. For example, "The first genre can be conquered by the extreme band geeks (band is the beating heart). These band geeks live, eat, sleep, and could possibly die along – side their instruments." It is important to have proper pronoun structure so when the audience is reading a paper, he or she can determine the subject(s) of the sentence and what he, she, or they are doing. It keeps the audience on track and not confused.
For this particular project, i used a lot of imagery features within my writing; and as I'm reading over my paper, i am realizing that i used the "-" quite frequently. Some examples would be, "Of course, there are those who just seem to pick an outfit out from the darkness of their closets – it’s like we’re heading back to the eighties or early nineties!", "Ironically, right next to this giddy group is the emo or scene type of kids. These particular geeks have one ear occupied with a headphone at all times. They cannot get enough of their metal, hardcore, or screamo –let’s slit our wrists types of music." or "Indeed band geeks have become a phenomenon within the educational habitat, but band geeks perform an impeccable talent that makes a bold statement – the beauty of music." Using so many hyphens i believe, helped my paper become more lively. The phrases following the hyphens allowed me to put in an extra two sense and to create a more vivid picture or to elaborate more on what im trying to explain, etc, etc.
I have some decent use of parallelism in my paper as well. For example, "In being a band geek, I have witnessed and have created my very own stereotypes towards my people." Using parallelism in my paper helps keep everything in order.
I have never really had that many problems with the use of pronouns. For example, "The first genre can be conquered by the extreme band geeks (band is the beating heart). These band geeks live, eat, sleep, and could possibly die along – side their instruments." It is important to have proper pronoun structure so when the audience is reading a paper, he or she can determine the subject(s) of the sentence and what he, she, or they are doing. It keeps the audience on track and not confused.
Question 10: Assessment Activity
The grammar concept i think that i have grasped and improved on the most (well hopefully) is the parallelism structure of a sentence.
In order to improve on this particular grammatical aspect, i did plenty of worksheets during my english class. It was always helpful and useful when we went over these exercises together as a class. It allowed me to see what mistakes that I was making and it allowed me to see what mistakes my fellow students were making. It was also very helpful to have even more practice through this blog. While my parallism isn't perfect, i still believe that i have improved on this particular aspect.
In order to improve on this particular grammatical aspect, i did plenty of worksheets during my english class. It was always helpful and useful when we went over these exercises together as a class. It allowed me to see what mistakes that I was making and it allowed me to see what mistakes my fellow students were making. It was also very helpful to have even more practice through this blog. While my parallism isn't perfect, i still believe that i have improved on this particular aspect.
Question 8 & 9: Assessment Acitivity
I will be talking about the citations i used within my research - argumentative paper.
8. The way in which citations worked in my research - argumemtative paper was to basically prove that i wasn't using someone else's information as my own thoughts. I used such citation to help back up my proposition. for example, i chose to argue whether cell phone use should be banned from vehicles entirely or if hand held devices should be allowed. In my firs paragraph, i talked about the potential fatalities cell phone use could cause. In order to make such a point stand out, i used an automobile death newspaper article from quebec. After i used the story from the newspaper, i put "quebec" in paranthesis. In doing so, it gives the author of the article credit and gives me as the author, a strong supporting detail.
9. Hence i used my argumentative paper as my example for question 8, i will just broaden my reasoning within this question. For an argument, the author needs strong facts to please his audience. Instead of just putting random facts into a paragraph, it is important for the author to notify when a source of authentification is necessary. When using the phrases, "according to jim turner" or "George bush said..." it is important to notify where such quotes came from. It is not a pleasent idea to lead the audience to thinking that he actually heard such a quote. BUT MOST IMPORTANTLY, especially in an argumentative paper's case, citation is so important to prevent plaigirism!
8. The way in which citations worked in my research - argumemtative paper was to basically prove that i wasn't using someone else's information as my own thoughts. I used such citation to help back up my proposition. for example, i chose to argue whether cell phone use should be banned from vehicles entirely or if hand held devices should be allowed. In my firs paragraph, i talked about the potential fatalities cell phone use could cause. In order to make such a point stand out, i used an automobile death newspaper article from quebec. After i used the story from the newspaper, i put "quebec" in paranthesis. In doing so, it gives the author of the article credit and gives me as the author, a strong supporting detail.
9. Hence i used my argumentative paper as my example for question 8, i will just broaden my reasoning within this question. For an argument, the author needs strong facts to please his audience. Instead of just putting random facts into a paragraph, it is important for the author to notify when a source of authentification is necessary. When using the phrases, "according to jim turner" or "George bush said..." it is important to notify where such quotes came from. It is not a pleasent idea to lead the audience to thinking that he actually heard such a quote. BUT MOST IMPORTANTLY, especially in an argumentative paper's case, citation is so important to prevent plaigirism!
Question 6 & 7: Assessment Activity
I chose the topic of the US economy crisis.
For the physical aspect, i would try and meet with some of the economic/business professors on this campus and maybe even attempt to talk to some higher officials of the kalamazoo community like the treasurer, etc, etc. Digitally, i would try and visit a specific business - like site where i cuold have a live chat with major corporate officials or with someone who really knows his or her economic stuff. also, i would go to the The Economists' website, etc, etc. So obviously the internet, business magazines, the economy section of the newspaper, the daily local and national news, tv shows, etc, etc could help immensely on this topic.
As for the certain text that should be included for this particular topic, it really depends. Hence we're focusing on the crisis aspect of the economy, it would be a good idea to talk about Michigan's economy, the inreased percentage rate of job lay offs, the constant changeds of the stock range, the inflated gas prices. Most importantly, i think it is crutial to incorporate the text about how our economy has become in such a deep hole. from there, the author could possibly draw some conclusions.
QUESTION SEVEN:
On terms of sources, i would stay away from the common websites like yahoo, google, wkipedia, etc, etc. It would be wise to hit up the encyclopedia's that keep track of all the economic facts in all states particularly in michigan. Possibly even history books to go from one the first core definition of the US's economic stance to what it has become today. Plus, use all the other sources that i described in the first paragraph of question 6.
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For the physical aspect, i would try and meet with some of the economic/business professors on this campus and maybe even attempt to talk to some higher officials of the kalamazoo community like the treasurer, etc, etc. Digitally, i would try and visit a specific business - like site where i cuold have a live chat with major corporate officials or with someone who really knows his or her economic stuff. also, i would go to the The Economists' website, etc, etc. So obviously the internet, business magazines, the economy section of the newspaper, the daily local and national news, tv shows, etc, etc could help immensely on this topic.
As for the certain text that should be included for this particular topic, it really depends. Hence we're focusing on the crisis aspect of the economy, it would be a good idea to talk about Michigan's economy, the inreased percentage rate of job lay offs, the constant changeds of the stock range, the inflated gas prices. Most importantly, i think it is crutial to incorporate the text about how our economy has become in such a deep hole. from there, the author could possibly draw some conclusions.
QUESTION SEVEN:
On terms of sources, i would stay away from the common websites like yahoo, google, wkipedia, etc, etc. It would be wise to hit up the encyclopedia's that keep track of all the economic facts in all states particularly in michigan. Possibly even history books to go from one the first core definition of the US's economic stance to what it has become today. Plus, use all the other sources that i described in the first paragraph of question 6.
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Question 5: Assessment Activity
The topic that i chose is a love letter.
The tools i would use in order to efficiently construct a love letter would obviously have to be some type of paper that has a lovey - dovey type of design to it as the border - ya know, that stuff you can find at hallmark, borders, or barnes and nobles. I could either write the letter in a nice and smoot gell - balled pen just to make it more person. For the sense of media, to really show my true love to that special someone, i would cut out letters or the appropriate words ffrom a magazine or newspaper to spell out my true feelings. Mind you, that my audience would consist of all other couples that are deeply in love or are those who want to really reach out to that special someone. But instead of a actual letter, i may just write a romantic poem, or write a letter consisting of all different variations of lyrics. But of course, in order for the whole lyrical note to work, the audience would have to consist of the more "musically informed" audience - ya know, teen to young adult ages.
The tools i would use in order to efficiently construct a love letter would obviously have to be some type of paper that has a lovey - dovey type of design to it as the border - ya know, that stuff you can find at hallmark, borders, or barnes and nobles. I could either write the letter in a nice and smoot gell - balled pen just to make it more person. For the sense of media, to really show my true love to that special someone, i would cut out letters or the appropriate words ffrom a magazine or newspaper to spell out my true feelings. Mind you, that my audience would consist of all other couples that are deeply in love or are those who want to really reach out to that special someone. But instead of a actual letter, i may just write a romantic poem, or write a letter consisting of all different variations of lyrics. But of course, in order for the whole lyrical note to work, the audience would have to consist of the more "musically informed" audience - ya know, teen to young adult ages.
Monday, March 31, 2008
Question 4: Assessment Activity
I will be comparing and contrasting the two genres of critical analyses and ethnography.
These two different genres are very similiar.Both genres require to pick a topic of most interest. For example, i chose band geeks as my subculture for my ethnography paper and chose the strange picture of a cat for my analyses paper. With these two genre's I had to a complilation of research and analyses. Being a band geek for four years in high school, i was constantly surrounded by the environment and knew very well as to style, personality, or category of all "band geeks". As for my critical analyses paper, i found a picture i had never seem before, examined it. According to the meaning of each of these papers an ethnography is way for the author to form his own personal definition abuot a certain topic. As for a critical analyses paper, it is the author's job to take apart his topic in an orderly fashion, discuss and create reasoning, etc, etc. For both genres, it is important to consider the audience as having no idea what the author is talking about. Thus, it is up to the other to formulate a clear and concise idea that most of the audience can hopefully agree to or relate to.
These two different genres are very similiar.Both genres require to pick a topic of most interest. For example, i chose band geeks as my subculture for my ethnography paper and chose the strange picture of a cat for my analyses paper. With these two genre's I had to a complilation of research and analyses. Being a band geek for four years in high school, i was constantly surrounded by the environment and knew very well as to style, personality, or category of all "band geeks". As for my critical analyses paper, i found a picture i had never seem before, examined it. According to the meaning of each of these papers an ethnography is way for the author to form his own personal definition abuot a certain topic. As for a critical analyses paper, it is the author's job to take apart his topic in an orderly fashion, discuss and create reasoning, etc, etc. For both genres, it is important to consider the audience as having no idea what the author is talking about. Thus, it is up to the other to formulate a clear and concise idea that most of the audience can hopefully agree to or relate to.
Question 3: Assessment activity
Once again, i will use my ethnography as my example for i believe i followed the genre quite nicely.
I believe that this particular genre of a paper didn't have any real strict boundaries to abide by. As long as you bestowed sufficient background information in order to get the audience up to par and supported your opinions or "definitions" realistically and logically, you really couldn't go wrong with this assignment. This genre of a paper was meant for the writer to become closer to a human subculture and explain not necessarily judgements, but a defintion of an opinion the writer has in his subculture.
I believe that this particular genre of a paper didn't have any real strict boundaries to abide by. As long as you bestowed sufficient background information in order to get the audience up to par and supported your opinions or "definitions" realistically and logically, you really couldn't go wrong with this assignment. This genre of a paper was meant for the writer to become closer to a human subculture and explain not necessarily judgements, but a defintion of an opinion the writer has in his subculture.
Question 2: assessment activity
I will be using my subculture paper as the prime example for this particular question.
For this paper, it was my mission to interpret my own definition of a subculture within our American society and i chose to talk about band geeks. The language i used was that of a sarcastic or "kinda poking fun" type of matter. A nice example would have to be the quote that created to match the illustration in which i used for this paper, "These band geeks live, eat, sleep, and could possibly die along side their instruments" Obviously, "...could possibly die along side their instruments" is a hyperbole but is based upon good terms in order to describe to people who not as familiar with the term "band geek" as i shamefully am.
On terms of describing my definition of band geek, i think i did very well. Without just rambling on about my own personal opinions about band geeks, i used my firsthand experience being in marching band for four years as a way to support my facts. Plus, i the color of my language helped as well.
My use of tone for this paper is quite comedic and very informal - like your typical high school newspaper submission. I believe that my style of language helped create many vivid images within the reader's head - enough so that the reader could get the main point of my definition.
In organizing the text, i organized my paragraphs of this particular paper the same as I do all my other papers: least important details first then slowly make it to the important facts at the end - it's always important to have a strong ending. As for my topic sentences, i just tried to include all the main points within a particular paragraph. I personally think my thesis statement is pretty good: "Band geeks are musically talented people within tight knit, social groups who have a vast variety of personalities spoken through distinct fashionable trends.
In general, as a definition paper it is up to the writer to make his own clear defintion because the audience he may be writing to may not know anything or may know everything about a particular topic so its up to the writer to provide enough background information and strong facts etc, etc.
For this paper, it was my mission to interpret my own definition of a subculture within our American society and i chose to talk about band geeks. The language i used was that of a sarcastic or "kinda poking fun" type of matter. A nice example would have to be the quote that created to match the illustration in which i used for this paper, "These band geeks live, eat, sleep, and could possibly die along side their instruments" Obviously, "...could possibly die along side their instruments" is a hyperbole but is based upon good terms in order to describe to people who not as familiar with the term "band geek" as i shamefully am.
On terms of describing my definition of band geek, i think i did very well. Without just rambling on about my own personal opinions about band geeks, i used my firsthand experience being in marching band for four years as a way to support my facts. Plus, i the color of my language helped as well.
My use of tone for this paper is quite comedic and very informal - like your typical high school newspaper submission. I believe that my style of language helped create many vivid images within the reader's head - enough so that the reader could get the main point of my definition.
In organizing the text, i organized my paragraphs of this particular paper the same as I do all my other papers: least important details first then slowly make it to the important facts at the end - it's always important to have a strong ending. As for my topic sentences, i just tried to include all the main points within a particular paragraph. I personally think my thesis statement is pretty good: "Band geeks are musically talented people within tight knit, social groups who have a vast variety of personalities spoken through distinct fashionable trends.
In general, as a definition paper it is up to the writer to make his own clear defintion because the audience he may be writing to may not know anything or may know everything about a particular topic so its up to the writer to provide enough background information and strong facts etc, etc.
Question 1: assessment activity
When it comes to the meaning of "genre", it all depends in the matter of context in which one is writing. Lets take this class's use of blogger.com - such a system is it's own genre. This particular genre requires the simplest form of babbling and whatnot. The main conern in how a genre is formulated is very dependent on the particular audience. Whether one is discussing an analyses over a newly discovered scientific phenominon or whether a student is just sharing a poem he has written to his class, either of these writers wrote their assignments according to the requirements of his audience. Different genres may require different tones, different information, different requirements, etc, etc. But as long as one appeals to the audience with the correct supporting and strong information, a particular genre is endless.
Thursday, March 20, 2008
The "Izz" Zone
There is a fifth dimension beyond that which is known to man. It is a dimension as grand as Sparta and as boisterous as thunder. It is the battle field between green and white, bewteen human and student, and it lies between the bench of Tom Izzo, and the court of his team. This is the dimension of Sparticus. It is an area which we call........ THE IZZ ZONE!
Monday, March 17, 2008
Article
http://www.hybridmagazine.com/reviews/1004/coheedcomic.shtml
so my computer is being a dope and this is the best i can do with the link to my article.
But anyhoot, this is not what my topic is going to be, but it has to deal with the same band just a different aspect.
I would describe this article as doing a decent job in making cut.
For one thing, i believe this is a credible source.
- it is a music based website with plenty of reviews on plenty of musical groups.
- It even has search box for viewers to be able to find particle articles
- I don't believe there is any bull crap within this article...the critic (Emblo Blake) proclaims within his article that he read Coheed and Cambria's comic book(s). No way is he fudging his review.
- the website is particularly credible for it has a "rights reserved" caption at the bottom.
- he ddesn't get into too much detail about the comics so that his article doesn't sound fabricated or just straight from the "inside cover" or "the back of the comic".
- I truly believe this Emblo Blake character for he talks about how coheed and cambria's book(s) have turned him "eh" towards coheed to bewildered (in a good way). He wants to come back for more.
- He gave nice detail about the comic books and to the connection to coheed's music, but not so much that he gave the idea away.
so my computer is being a dope and this is the best i can do with the link to my article.
But anyhoot, this is not what my topic is going to be, but it has to deal with the same band just a different aspect.
I would describe this article as doing a decent job in making cut.
For one thing, i believe this is a credible source.
- it is a music based website with plenty of reviews on plenty of musical groups.
- It even has search box for viewers to be able to find particle articles
- I don't believe there is any bull crap within this article...the critic (Emblo Blake) proclaims within his article that he read Coheed and Cambria's comic book(s). No way is he fudging his review.
- the website is particularly credible for it has a "rights reserved" caption at the bottom.
- he ddesn't get into too much detail about the comics so that his article doesn't sound fabricated or just straight from the "inside cover" or "the back of the comic".
- I truly believe this Emblo Blake character for he talks about how coheed and cambria's book(s) have turned him "eh" towards coheed to bewildered (in a good way). He wants to come back for more.
- He gave nice detail about the comic books and to the connection to coheed's music, but not so much that he gave the idea away.
Tuesday, March 11, 2008
important paper components
The key features for analyzing a particular text or everday way of living is to provide a summary, to show close attention to the context, to lead your audience to a clear intrepretation as to what a certain creator is trying to convey, and to have reasonable support for the conclusions that you have made through such interpretations. Be sure to think about the topic you are analyzing about for you may have to write in a different tone in order to interest the reader. Following the idiot's guide is important because it keeps the ideas of the paper in a smart order in order to keep the audience interested and focused. You don't want to make the audience feel dumb but you want the audience to have a clearer understanding as to what is being interpreted. Research is important depending on the topic of analyses, although to have past information could be a helpful tool for backing up your own interpretation. I think you should really focus on conveying your personal interpretation but back it up with probable cause. Do NOT just focus on the critique portion of the paper. Consider what others may think, etc, etc.
project proposal
While i am really unsure as to what i am going to analyze, i have a great interest in analyzing a music video from a band that i have recently grown to love - Coheed and Cambria. This music video portrays their latest single, "Feathers". Coheed and Cambria has been known to construct some very interesting lyrical pieces. Interestingly enough, all of their songs have strummed along to a comic book they have created. Coheed and Cambria have their own style of "rock" music and produce very unique rock anthems. The unique and fresh musicality of Coheed and Cambria provides musical videos with interesting story plots and "Feathers" is one of the more fascinating videos Coheed and Cambria has to offer. The video is sat back to the 1950s and coheed and cambria are presented as the common "delivery men" : milk, meat, mail, etc,etc. They all get invited into this women's house. Apparently, the family is all out of food so she decides to eat the members of the band. But as the lyrics go along with the video...interesting connections are made. Thus, i hope to try and successfully take bits and pieces from the video and relate them to the lyrics and see what they band/lead singer is trying to convey. Also, to show how such a video portrays the lead singer's/band's view towards women. Of course, i will answer the questions why do i think this video was made in such a way, what is being conveyed, when was the video taken place, etc, etc. I may possibly even compare this video to other previous videos to nit pick at common trends and whatnot.
Should i stick to the one video
Or should i do an assortment of videos??
Should i stick to the one video
Or should i do an assortment of videos??
response to poem
MY RESPONSES
1. My initial response to this poem is that someone is always working with a wheel barrow while working on a farm
2. I reacted in such way based upon an intellectual response. Once i read the last line of the poem "beside the white chickens", the landscape of a farm just popped into my head.
3. This text is obviously a peom, a very free - verse poem. It really is just a realistic and poetic statement.
4. The author of this peom just wants to portray to the reader that wheel barrows (of any color) are essential tools when it comes to laborous work.
5. I believe the thesis of this poem to be, doing ardous work would not be sufficient without a wheel barrow being able to carry tremendous loads of items.
6. It is obviously the genre of free - verse poetry. Like i have proclaimed earlier, it is a simple sentence with so much meaning.
7. I have seen my dad use a wheel barrow time and time again when he's constantly working in the back yard: hauling dirt, bricks, wood chips, etc,etc. Basically a wheelbarrow is an everyday life object that a lot of people use. Commercials are always finding ways to proclaim how "terrible" wheel barrows are for the back and whatnot.
FRIEND'S RESPONSE
1) My inital response is that the poem is structured in an interesting structure and that there is probably a deeper meaning.
2)Intellectual (I'm a little confused on this one, forgive me)
3) It is organized in two lines
4)The author wants the audience to see that the wheelbarrow represents something more.
5)I would say that the thesis is something about how the wheelbarrow is a necessity for the people using it.
6)I think that it defies genre labeling.
7)I've seen this object before in life.
DIFFERENCES BETWEEN RESPONSES
In general, i had a much deeper interpretation towards this peom then my friend did. I particularly found her response to question number six was very interesting, but i wish she would have explained more. Instead of just creating the analyses that it has an interesting structure and whatnot, i believe my analyses in depth.....i dunno.
1. My initial response to this poem is that someone is always working with a wheel barrow while working on a farm
2. I reacted in such way based upon an intellectual response. Once i read the last line of the poem "beside the white chickens", the landscape of a farm just popped into my head.
3. This text is obviously a peom, a very free - verse poem. It really is just a realistic and poetic statement.
4. The author of this peom just wants to portray to the reader that wheel barrows (of any color) are essential tools when it comes to laborous work.
5. I believe the thesis of this poem to be, doing ardous work would not be sufficient without a wheel barrow being able to carry tremendous loads of items.
6. It is obviously the genre of free - verse poetry. Like i have proclaimed earlier, it is a simple sentence with so much meaning.
7. I have seen my dad use a wheel barrow time and time again when he's constantly working in the back yard: hauling dirt, bricks, wood chips, etc,etc. Basically a wheelbarrow is an everyday life object that a lot of people use. Commercials are always finding ways to proclaim how "terrible" wheel barrows are for the back and whatnot.
FRIEND'S RESPONSE
1) My inital response is that the poem is structured in an interesting structure and that there is probably a deeper meaning.
2)Intellectual (I'm a little confused on this one, forgive me)
3) It is organized in two lines
4)The author wants the audience to see that the wheelbarrow represents something more.
5)I would say that the thesis is something about how the wheelbarrow is a necessity for the people using it.
6)I think that it defies genre labeling.
7)I've seen this object before in life.
DIFFERENCES BETWEEN RESPONSES
In general, i had a much deeper interpretation towards this peom then my friend did. I particularly found her response to question number six was very interesting, but i wish she would have explained more. Instead of just creating the analyses that it has an interesting structure and whatnot, i believe my analyses in depth.....i dunno.
Active vs. Passive/Parallelism wrkshts
ACTIVE VS. PASSIVE WRKSHT
1. Steve gave the check to the waitres.
2. The policy recommends a change.
3. Jenny studied the problem.
4. A bolt of lightening hit the tower.
5. Jose caught the fly ball.
6. People overheard that some will leave the company.
7. Mr. Smith gave the donation.
8. A rancher in Wyoming discovered the gold.
9. The check was worth one million dollars!
10. The family made several donations.
PARALLELISM WRKSHT!
1. The chapter starts on page 129 and ends on page 144.
2. Betty is pretty, is kind, and has charm.
3. If you go to the drugstore, please remember to pick up Nick's prescription, to buy some toothepaste, and to look for a birthday card.
4. I spent an hour with Ms. King reviewing my job performance, assessing my goals, and discussing my future with company.
5. The dog's size, kindness, and the dog's temperament made him a good choice for our family.
6. Janice was the most admired, the most independant, and the most ambitious person of the family.
7. Leo's day is so long that he gets up at 5:00 am, leaves for work at 5:30 am, eats dinner at 10 pm, and goes to bed at 1:00 am.
1. Steve gave the check to the waitres.
2. The policy recommends a change.
3. Jenny studied the problem.
4. A bolt of lightening hit the tower.
5. Jose caught the fly ball.
6. People overheard that some will leave the company.
7. Mr. Smith gave the donation.
8. A rancher in Wyoming discovered the gold.
9. The check was worth one million dollars!
10. The family made several donations.
PARALLELISM WRKSHT!
1. The chapter starts on page 129 and ends on page 144.
2. Betty is pretty, is kind, and has charm.
3. If you go to the drugstore, please remember to pick up Nick's prescription, to buy some toothepaste, and to look for a birthday card.
4. I spent an hour with Ms. King reviewing my job performance, assessing my goals, and discussing my future with company.
5. The dog's size, kindness, and the dog's temperament made him a good choice for our family.
6. Janice was the most admired, the most independant, and the most ambitious person of the family.
7. Leo's day is so long that he gets up at 5:00 am, leaves for work at 5:30 am, eats dinner at 10 pm, and goes to bed at 1:00 am.
Comparing the two articles
According to the first article "How to write an Academic Paper", it does a really good job in analyzing how papers are written in high school as to how papers are written at the college level. This article takes apart each important aspect of writing a quality academic paper and gives thorough information as what a student can do to impress his or her fellow readers (and what not to do of course). Audiencewise, this article does an excellent job to give firm and direct information to its readers. Hence probably the majority of the readers are freshmen in college, this article does a great job in analyzing what not to do and what to do with an academic paper and how to do so effeciently.
On the other hand, the second article does just the opposite. Yes, scientific reports are boring but to all the "nutty" professors in this world, such reports and outstanding and beyond interesting! Thus, this article is probably more or less than a satire on how to write another boring, scientific report. But this article tells the reader to not state a main point, hide important and much needed facts, etc, etc. In such case, such a type of paper. Such a paper is only stating facts and not paying attention to the main idea of analyzing any type of text with not just supporting your feelings, but using elements from the text to support/not support the analyses.
On the other hand, the second article does just the opposite. Yes, scientific reports are boring but to all the "nutty" professors in this world, such reports and outstanding and beyond interesting! Thus, this article is probably more or less than a satire on how to write another boring, scientific report. But this article tells the reader to not state a main point, hide important and much needed facts, etc, etc. In such case, such a type of paper. Such a paper is only stating facts and not paying attention to the main idea of analyzing any type of text with not just supporting your feelings, but using elements from the text to support/not support the analyses.
Tuesday, February 26, 2008
Analyses
Like any other instructive paper, an analyses paper should contain strong background information in order to keep the audience interested. Thus, it is important to write an analyses according to the type of audience such a paper is being written to adress. In an analyses paper, you must select strong points in which you choose to analyze. When analyzing a certain topic, i believe that it's important to take opinions already expressed and either defend or oppose these opinions with evidence. Going back to the audience, it is important to take the prior knowledge that audience and expand it. Analyses isn't just about statistics and numbers; and while this type of analyses can be crucial for certain topics, words mean a lot more.
Tuesday, February 19, 2008
Comments about the structure of this classe
I think blogging is great, new, and innovative way for students to interact with their fellow students. Within the classroom setting, some students have a problem expressing their thoughts and opinions in front an actual class but somehow, love expressing themselves through writing or "blogging". I, personally, have enjoyed doing assignments on a blog because i love showing my personality through writing...obviously. I think that future 1050 classes should take the blog into consideration. In the classroom setting, when it comes to turning in homework assignments, only the teacher makes suggestions or makes corrections. But with the blog, fellow students can make suggestions and help one another.
Topic Sentence wrsht
TOPIC SENTENCE WORKSHEET
Thesis: While band geeks are classified within their own genre, they are the everyday
human being with a special talent on the side.
First topic sentence: Band geeks do not have their "own" personal style, but a collaboration of many different styles.
Supporting Details:Band geeks can be the Abercrombie or Hollister goers who are either afraid to admit to the fact that they enjoy band or the fact that they just doan't care and have a love for music. Band geeks can go in the direction of the emo or the so - called scene style of dress: the eyeliner, dark clothing, band t - shirts, or girl pants on boys. Then of course, you have the band geeks (like myself) that where whatever they choose to wear.
Transition:While different styles of dress infect the ways of band geeks, band geeks represent the everyday personn
Second topic sentence: The term band geek can be affiliated with any type of person and any type of personality.
Supporting Details: There are your classical nerd of the nerdiest types of band geeks: big glasses, nerdy clothing, and the occasional acne. But just like in any classroom, you've got the slackers, the "too good at their instrument and should be playing in a professional symphondic orchestra" type of students, the students who spend too much time playing their instruments, the students who are taking band in order to only have to take one half credit of physical education.
Transition: As I am laying out the common stereotypes of the band geek, there is one common true love - music.
Third topic sentence: Many of band geek thrive to make beautiful music.
Supporting details: Band geeks practice and work very hard as a soloist or as a team to make an audience fill up with satisfying tears. Band geeks live off of a music and appreciate what an art music really is. Band geeks don't thrive upon the ranking they receive when it comes to their quality of play. Band geeks just enjoy the sound of all the different instruments coming together as one to make the world's ears tingle with joy.
Conclusion: Bands geeks are just another wonderful creation within the average joes and high - acclaimers of the entire human race spectrum. Bands geeks dress to please themselves, not others and will act for themselves and not others. But, band geeks strive to make music for others - music to never be forgotten.
Good Device?
It is a good idea to grab your audience's attention. Be sure to include background information, define anything that your readers may not know, try and connect your readers to the topic of your essay, etc, etc.
Good conclusion?
As always restate your thesis and moint points, give an implication of action, think of analogies or examples so that the reader can get that final connection, and always go back and refer to what was said in the introduction.
Thesis: While band geeks are classified within their own genre, they are the everyday
human being with a special talent on the side.
First topic sentence: Band geeks do not have their "own" personal style, but a collaboration of many different styles.
Supporting Details:Band geeks can be the Abercrombie or Hollister goers who are either afraid to admit to the fact that they enjoy band or the fact that they just doan't care and have a love for music. Band geeks can go in the direction of the emo or the so - called scene style of dress: the eyeliner, dark clothing, band t - shirts, or girl pants on boys. Then of course, you have the band geeks (like myself) that where whatever they choose to wear.
Transition:While different styles of dress infect the ways of band geeks, band geeks represent the everyday personn
Second topic sentence: The term band geek can be affiliated with any type of person and any type of personality.
Supporting Details: There are your classical nerd of the nerdiest types of band geeks: big glasses, nerdy clothing, and the occasional acne. But just like in any classroom, you've got the slackers, the "too good at their instrument and should be playing in a professional symphondic orchestra" type of students, the students who spend too much time playing their instruments, the students who are taking band in order to only have to take one half credit of physical education.
Transition: As I am laying out the common stereotypes of the band geek, there is one common true love - music.
Third topic sentence: Many of band geek thrive to make beautiful music.
Supporting details: Band geeks practice and work very hard as a soloist or as a team to make an audience fill up with satisfying tears. Band geeks live off of a music and appreciate what an art music really is. Band geeks don't thrive upon the ranking they receive when it comes to their quality of play. Band geeks just enjoy the sound of all the different instruments coming together as one to make the world's ears tingle with joy.
Conclusion: Bands geeks are just another wonderful creation within the average joes and high - acclaimers of the entire human race spectrum. Bands geeks dress to please themselves, not others and will act for themselves and not others. But, band geeks strive to make music for others - music to never be forgotten.
Good Device?
It is a good idea to grab your audience's attention. Be sure to include background information, define anything that your readers may not know, try and connect your readers to the topic of your essay, etc, etc.
Good conclusion?
As always restate your thesis and moint points, give an implication of action, think of analogies or examples so that the reader can get that final connection, and always go back and refer to what was said in the introduction.
Tuesday, February 12, 2008
Peer Editing Review/Subculture Assignment/ Definition Paragraph
SUBCULTURES
1) Band Geeks!
- Friends with every other subculter group within the high school scene
- Like all different types of music
- Comparing to the defintion from Mean Girls, "over sexually active band geeks".
- At lunch time, band geeks sit with other geeks...always the deliquents though.
- Different personalities, different styles, different backgrounds.
etc, etc.
2) Vegans
- What they eat and how do they get/make the food?
- Views on animal rights
- What they think of the "meat eaters".
3) The heavy church - goers or "Church Jocks"
- how often such people attend mass.
- how many holy books they have in their house
- how many times do they watch some religious channel on TV
- Only hang out with the Church clique.
( I could go on and on about this one)
- this particular subculture is strictly based off the life of my parents
i certainly do NOT wish to offend anyone who has their religion as a
major priority in their life.
PEER REVIEW
I thought that filling out the peer editing sheet was helpful. I enjoyed the comments that i received on my paper. But of course, i didn't understand some of the comments that were suggested. Thus, I think that it would be even more helpful if after everyone has filled out some peer editing sheets, go to the editors who made such comments and have them explain to the author as to what his or her intentions were. Like when it comes to finding sentences that don't fit or don't make any sense, i believe that the editor should be able to actually speak to the author.
DEFINITION PARAGRAPH
- my own topic: We Are America
Years ago, immigrants from all over the world seeked America's hand. America was proclaimed the land of opportunity and freedom - still is today. Til this day, thousands flock to America hoping that they will have the better life. But, the now brings forth other ideas. By the rest of the world, America is known as the enemy, a power hog, a country that is always trying to solve everyone else's problems. America tends to put the pimp or the moron into office. On the day of September eleventh, the unaware ignorance of America was brought to truth through shambles. America believes in spending more money while the economy is suffering. America is the Hollywood of the world.Ever since America was established, any kind of enemy has tried to shut America down - America has always prevailed in some shape or form; and somehow, since Gettysburgh America and her citizens have never turned on one another and have yet to surrender to its' enemies.
side note: Okay, so i don't hate america. That's just my definition!
1) Band Geeks!
- Friends with every other subculter group within the high school scene
- Like all different types of music
- Comparing to the defintion from Mean Girls, "over sexually active band geeks".
- At lunch time, band geeks sit with other geeks...always the deliquents though.
- Different personalities, different styles, different backgrounds.
etc, etc.
2) Vegans
- What they eat and how do they get/make the food?
- Views on animal rights
- What they think of the "meat eaters".
3) The heavy church - goers or "Church Jocks"
- how often such people attend mass.
- how many holy books they have in their house
- how many times do they watch some religious channel on TV
- Only hang out with the Church clique.
( I could go on and on about this one)
- this particular subculture is strictly based off the life of my parents
i certainly do NOT wish to offend anyone who has their religion as a
major priority in their life.
PEER REVIEW
I thought that filling out the peer editing sheet was helpful. I enjoyed the comments that i received on my paper. But of course, i didn't understand some of the comments that were suggested. Thus, I think that it would be even more helpful if after everyone has filled out some peer editing sheets, go to the editors who made such comments and have them explain to the author as to what his or her intentions were. Like when it comes to finding sentences that don't fit or don't make any sense, i believe that the editor should be able to actually speak to the author.
DEFINITION PARAGRAPH
- my own topic: We Are America
Years ago, immigrants from all over the world seeked America's hand. America was proclaimed the land of opportunity and freedom - still is today. Til this day, thousands flock to America hoping that they will have the better life. But, the now brings forth other ideas. By the rest of the world, America is known as the enemy, a power hog, a country that is always trying to solve everyone else's problems. America tends to put the pimp or the moron into office. On the day of September eleventh, the unaware ignorance of America was brought to truth through shambles. America believes in spending more money while the economy is suffering. America is the Hollywood of the world.Ever since America was established, any kind of enemy has tried to shut America down - America has always prevailed in some shape or form; and somehow, since Gettysburgh America and her citizens have never turned on one another and have yet to surrender to its' enemies.
side note: Okay, so i don't hate america. That's just my definition!
Tuesday, February 5, 2008
Thoughts on an Essay
Meet Joe Blog
In general, I thought the writer of this essay did an excellent job in they history aspect as to who created the blog and what a blog actually is. Overall, the transitional and topic sentences were very clear and fluid. In many aspects, I didn’t like that fact that I had to keep on looking down on the foots to realized what the writer was really talking about. Thus, this essay would be most appropriate for the hardcore bloggers. In some ways, I thought this essay was too colorful and didn’t do a well enough job in getting straight to the many points that were offered. Thus, I thought too many different ideas were brought forth. Also, I thought the conclusion was week; for one thing, the writer didn’t summarize the main points in any shape or form. Also, the one paragraph at the top of page 559 just seems random - a filler in order to get to the writer’s next point.
In general, I thought the writer of this essay did an excellent job in they history aspect as to who created the blog and what a blog actually is. Overall, the transitional and topic sentences were very clear and fluid. In many aspects, I didn’t like that fact that I had to keep on looking down on the foots to realized what the writer was really talking about. Thus, this essay would be most appropriate for the hardcore bloggers. In some ways, I thought this essay was too colorful and didn’t do a well enough job in getting straight to the many points that were offered. Thus, I thought too many different ideas were brought forth. Also, I thought the conclusion was week; for one thing, the writer didn’t summarize the main points in any shape or form. Also, the one paragraph at the top of page 559 just seems random - a filler in order to get to the writer’s next point.
project proposal
please PLEASE......give me your constructive criticism!
I will be arguing for the banning of cell phone use while operating a vehicle. For a pinch of background information, all of us young ones have once, twice, or maybe a lot of times have yacked away on our cell phones while driving our cars. From researching a few surveys, statistics have shown that driving while using a cell phone has caused many accidents. As for the supporting points, I will notion as to how many states or countries have already banned cell phone use while driving and see how such a law has effected (positively or negatively) the drivers of today. I will talk about how many accidents, especially how many fatal accidents have occurred from cell phone use while driving. I will definitely include the counterargument (cars need some mobile device in case of emergency) because it’s a justified cause. I may even include health issues that have occurred as well. I will also use surveys representing those who think or those who do not think cell phone use should be banned and the reasons why. All of these supporting details I believe support my position in a way that could be convincing. Using laws that have already been passed and their results will truly verify if my position is strong. Presenting real car accidents may open my audience’s eyes. In opposing the counterargument, anything that may keeps our eyes away from the road is risk including hands - free devices.
I will be arguing for the banning of cell phone use while operating a vehicle. For a pinch of background information, all of us young ones have once, twice, or maybe a lot of times have yacked away on our cell phones while driving our cars. From researching a few surveys, statistics have shown that driving while using a cell phone has caused many accidents. As for the supporting points, I will notion as to how many states or countries have already banned cell phone use while driving and see how such a law has effected (positively or negatively) the drivers of today. I will talk about how many accidents, especially how many fatal accidents have occurred from cell phone use while driving. I will definitely include the counterargument (cars need some mobile device in case of emergency) because it’s a justified cause. I may even include health issues that have occurred as well. I will also use surveys representing those who think or those who do not think cell phone use should be banned and the reasons why. All of these supporting details I believe support my position in a way that could be convincing. Using laws that have already been passed and their results will truly verify if my position is strong. Presenting real car accidents may open my audience’s eyes. In opposing the counterargument, anything that may keeps our eyes away from the road is risk including hands - free devices.
exercise 2!
WORK - CITED
Britt, Robert R., ed. "Poll: Ban Cell Phones While Driving." LiveScience (2000).
5 Feb. 2008 http://www.livescience.com/technology/060527_cell_phones.html.
SUMMARY
According to a new established survey, most Americans want some kind of law to ban the use of cell phones while operating a vehicle. Cell phones in general have been great cause in car accidents. Even the “safer” hands - free cell phones have made driving difficult. Many drivers have even admitted that their driving skills speed out the window as they’re talking on their cell phones.
PARAPHRASE
For years there have been constantly persisting to keep cell phones outside the parameters of public areas: theaters, restaurants, etc. But according to Robert Roy Britt’s article, “Poll: Ban Cell Phones While Driving”, he proclaims, “a new survey finds two - thirds of Americans would support a law banning cell phone use while driving” (Britt 1). Within such a survey, only 29 percent of the 849 people that were surveyed sad that they didn’t want such a ban. But, according to Britt, “65 percent said states should ban drivers from talking on cell phones” (Britt 1). Many surveys have suggested that hands - free cell phones still cause drivers to react and to drive slowly. The use of cell phones have caused too many fatal accidents and too many annoying, traffic jams we’ve all grown to hate. Another reference towards phone owners admit to “sometimes not driving as safely as they should while using mobile devices” (Britt 1).
RESPONSE
I firmly believe that cell phones should be banned for use while driving. While hands - free devices may cause slow reaction time while driving, I believe us humans need some mobile device handy when an emergency shows up (not every car has an Onstar button). Cell phones cause one hand to be off of the wheel , thus one hand for reaction just doesn’t cut it. Plus, there are so many other things a “cell - driver” could be doing while on the phone: radio, looking for something, or just staring off into space.
FINAL TOPIC
I am still sticking with the argument that cell phone use should be banned while operating a vehicle. I will not use this article for is has stated the same facts as the prior article that I used for the last exercise.
Britt, Robert R., ed. "Poll: Ban Cell Phones While Driving." LiveScience (2000).
5 Feb. 2008 http://www.livescience.com/technology/060527_cell_phones.html.
SUMMARY
According to a new established survey, most Americans want some kind of law to ban the use of cell phones while operating a vehicle. Cell phones in general have been great cause in car accidents. Even the “safer” hands - free cell phones have made driving difficult. Many drivers have even admitted that their driving skills speed out the window as they’re talking on their cell phones.
PARAPHRASE
For years there have been constantly persisting to keep cell phones outside the parameters of public areas: theaters, restaurants, etc. But according to Robert Roy Britt’s article, “Poll: Ban Cell Phones While Driving”, he proclaims, “a new survey finds two - thirds of Americans would support a law banning cell phone use while driving” (Britt 1). Within such a survey, only 29 percent of the 849 people that were surveyed sad that they didn’t want such a ban. But, according to Britt, “65 percent said states should ban drivers from talking on cell phones” (Britt 1). Many surveys have suggested that hands - free cell phones still cause drivers to react and to drive slowly. The use of cell phones have caused too many fatal accidents and too many annoying, traffic jams we’ve all grown to hate. Another reference towards phone owners admit to “sometimes not driving as safely as they should while using mobile devices” (Britt 1).
RESPONSE
I firmly believe that cell phones should be banned for use while driving. While hands - free devices may cause slow reaction time while driving, I believe us humans need some mobile device handy when an emergency shows up (not every car has an Onstar button). Cell phones cause one hand to be off of the wheel , thus one hand for reaction just doesn’t cut it. Plus, there are so many other things a “cell - driver” could be doing while on the phone: radio, looking for something, or just staring off into space.
FINAL TOPIC
I am still sticking with the argument that cell phone use should be banned while operating a vehicle. I will not use this article for is has stated the same facts as the prior article that I used for the last exercise.
Tuesday, January 29, 2008
Paraphrasing/ Peer Reviewing Responses
Topic: Banning of cell phone use while operating a vehicle
Title of Article: Cell phone safety concerns prompt legislative proposals.
Paraphrased Summary:
According to The National Highway Traffic Safety Administration, the cause of almost 30% of recent accidents have been the constant driver's use of cell phones while driving(Martin 15). In fact, Senator John Corzine and Representative Gary Ackerman have proposed for a specific law against cell phone use. Particularly both Corzine and Ackerman want to "...ban the use of hand - held cell phones while driving." (Martin 15). In that case, as long as drivers are being technologically assisted by a bluetooth, an earpiece , or a speaker phone, the drvers will not be charged. Thus, the driver can only answer the phone if the car is not moving and the phone can only work through voice activiation. According to recent studies, drivers that are provided with hands - free cell phones provide themselves with more safety. According to the University of North Carolina's "final results" of their recent study, out of the 32,000 accidents that have been recorded, wireless phones have been the cause of less than 2% of the accidents while objects interfering with one's own driving (a cell phone) caused 29.4% of the accidents ( Martin 16).
RESPONSE:
For drivers to only be able to talk while driving with an earpiece or through voice activation is great a idea. The fact that this can only operate for when the vehicle has stopped is an even better predicament. From U of NC's recent study, 32,000 accidents is more than a reliable amount to receive accurate and plausible data. The fact that only 2% of the 32,000 accidents were caused by wireless devices is remarkable! Thus, i am all for such a legislation.
POTENTIAL IDEAS:
I could look at the other more common causes of most of the automobile accidnets in this country. I could look from the other point of view in which we need cell phones in case of an emergency or that cell phones are not even close to being the leading factor in accidents:radio, eating, looking for something under the seat. I could also look into the fatality rate when cell phones are the cause for the accident. I will look into the states that already have a law against cell phone use under the operation of a vehicle.
PEER REVIEW RESPONSES:
1) I believe that peer viewing should be open because i believe it's nice idea to know as to whom is viewing your work. Thus, if you happen to like what that particular person has said on various occasions, then one could ask that person for advice or for his or her opinion.
2)When it comes to grammar and punctuation, that should only be needed if there are serious occurences. Besides the serious occurences, the reviewer can just make simple corrections. I believe that the main focus should be on the genre of a works and how it's structured. Once the structure is all figured out, then the simplicity of grammar and mechanics can be factored in.
3)Finally, i believe that students should be able to write about topics of their choice. Being able to choose topics gives the writer a chance write strongly on a topic he or she is interested in. When a writer has an interest in a topic, he or she will do a better job in presenting presenting him/herself. Unless, it's done at the last minute....har har.
Title of Article: Cell phone safety concerns prompt legislative proposals.
Paraphrased Summary:
According to The National Highway Traffic Safety Administration, the cause of almost 30% of recent accidents have been the constant driver's use of cell phones while driving(Martin 15). In fact, Senator John Corzine and Representative Gary Ackerman have proposed for a specific law against cell phone use. Particularly both Corzine and Ackerman want to "...ban the use of hand - held cell phones while driving." (Martin 15). In that case, as long as drivers are being technologically assisted by a bluetooth, an earpiece , or a speaker phone, the drvers will not be charged. Thus, the driver can only answer the phone if the car is not moving and the phone can only work through voice activiation. According to recent studies, drivers that are provided with hands - free cell phones provide themselves with more safety. According to the University of North Carolina's "final results" of their recent study, out of the 32,000 accidents that have been recorded, wireless phones have been the cause of less than 2% of the accidents while objects interfering with one's own driving (a cell phone) caused 29.4% of the accidents ( Martin 16).
RESPONSE:
For drivers to only be able to talk while driving with an earpiece or through voice activation is great a idea. The fact that this can only operate for when the vehicle has stopped is an even better predicament. From U of NC's recent study, 32,000 accidents is more than a reliable amount to receive accurate and plausible data. The fact that only 2% of the 32,000 accidents were caused by wireless devices is remarkable! Thus, i am all for such a legislation.
POTENTIAL IDEAS:
I could look at the other more common causes of most of the automobile accidnets in this country. I could look from the other point of view in which we need cell phones in case of an emergency or that cell phones are not even close to being the leading factor in accidents:radio, eating, looking for something under the seat. I could also look into the fatality rate when cell phones are the cause for the accident. I will look into the states that already have a law against cell phone use under the operation of a vehicle.
PEER REVIEW RESPONSES:
1) I believe that peer viewing should be open because i believe it's nice idea to know as to whom is viewing your work. Thus, if you happen to like what that particular person has said on various occasions, then one could ask that person for advice or for his or her opinion.
2)When it comes to grammar and punctuation, that should only be needed if there are serious occurences. Besides the serious occurences, the reviewer can just make simple corrections. I believe that the main focus should be on the genre of a works and how it's structured. Once the structure is all figured out, then the simplicity of grammar and mechanics can be factored in.
3)Finally, i believe that students should be able to write about topics of their choice. Being able to choose topics gives the writer a chance write strongly on a topic he or she is interested in. When a writer has an interest in a topic, he or she will do a better job in presenting presenting him/herself. Unless, it's done at the last minute....har har.
Tuesday, January 22, 2008
tttc
Thesis statement: Through the pressure of success, peers, social and education upbringing, and the wonder of technological use, many students have made cheating acceptable, but schools are finally constructing rules to punish and reward those within or out of academic honesty.
Topic sentence 1: When it comes to cheating, it seems as though every callibur of student has cheated at least once within his or her educational career.
Transition 1: While the act of cheating has become a daily event, the cheaters are not the only culprits within this troublesome habbit.
Topic sentence 2: It is to be presumed that the cheaters themselves should be blamed for their actions but the lack of parental and teacher guidance has given them a helping hand.
Transition 2: As the cheating is taking its toll and society seems not to care, colleges across america are finally starting to take action.
Topic sentence 3: Colleges across the nation are starting to provide students with strict codes of conduct towards cheating and their repercussions.
Transition 3: As colleges keep on succeeding with the academic honesty policy, many schools still do not have an efficient way of punishing or rewarding students actions towards other educational policies.
Conclusion: Many aspects of life have contributed towards the steady need for students to cheat. Thought the pressure of exams and the pressure to succeed constantly dwell upon a student's mind, there is still no accurate consenses as to how many students have actually cheated in their lifetime. As a society, all students, teachers, parents, and school districts need to work together in order to subsidize such an unrewarding habbit.
TOPICS WORTH ARGUING ABOUT...
1) Should marching band be counted as a 1/2 physical education credit?
- In my opinion, no.
A lot of high schools have football, baseball, and basketball teams, etc etc and they don't receive a half credit for gym.
While marching band is a physical activity, the type of games played in a gym class are tennis, basketball, soccer,etc,etc.....nooot marching steps!
A lot of students do marching band for a year just so they only have to take the 1/2 credit of gym. So i guess the band won't do as well, or such students will be waisting their time cause marching band IS very time - consuming.
2) Is scientology an ethical religion?
- In my opinion, no.
Many would believe that scientology is not a religion hence its based upon birth from aliens or somethine else.
I guess there is no physical evidence of such a religion
Certain media prospects have hindered our ideas towards scientology.
3) Should cell phone use be illegal while operating a vehicle?
- in my opinion, yes.
Many fatal accidents have occurred from cell phone use while driving.
like drinking, cell phone use impairs your judgement while driving.
4) should senior citizens take another road test once at a certain age?
- in my opinion, yes.
Not very important, but logical, most drive very slowly causing many drivers to perform dangerous maneuvers to get around the driver.
reflexes are definitely not as quick
Eyesight not as kean
The dangers of driving at night.
Topic sentence 1: When it comes to cheating, it seems as though every callibur of student has cheated at least once within his or her educational career.
Transition 1: While the act of cheating has become a daily event, the cheaters are not the only culprits within this troublesome habbit.
Topic sentence 2: It is to be presumed that the cheaters themselves should be blamed for their actions but the lack of parental and teacher guidance has given them a helping hand.
Transition 2: As the cheating is taking its toll and society seems not to care, colleges across america are finally starting to take action.
Topic sentence 3: Colleges across the nation are starting to provide students with strict codes of conduct towards cheating and their repercussions.
Transition 3: As colleges keep on succeeding with the academic honesty policy, many schools still do not have an efficient way of punishing or rewarding students actions towards other educational policies.
Conclusion: Many aspects of life have contributed towards the steady need for students to cheat. Thought the pressure of exams and the pressure to succeed constantly dwell upon a student's mind, there is still no accurate consenses as to how many students have actually cheated in their lifetime. As a society, all students, teachers, parents, and school districts need to work together in order to subsidize such an unrewarding habbit.
TOPICS WORTH ARGUING ABOUT...
1) Should marching band be counted as a 1/2 physical education credit?
- In my opinion, no.
A lot of high schools have football, baseball, and basketball teams, etc etc and they don't receive a half credit for gym.
While marching band is a physical activity, the type of games played in a gym class are tennis, basketball, soccer,etc,etc.....nooot marching steps!
A lot of students do marching band for a year just so they only have to take the 1/2 credit of gym. So i guess the band won't do as well, or such students will be waisting their time cause marching band IS very time - consuming.
2) Is scientology an ethical religion?
- In my opinion, no.
Many would believe that scientology is not a religion hence its based upon birth from aliens or somethine else.
I guess there is no physical evidence of such a religion
Certain media prospects have hindered our ideas towards scientology.
3) Should cell phone use be illegal while operating a vehicle?
- in my opinion, yes.
Many fatal accidents have occurred from cell phone use while driving.
like drinking, cell phone use impairs your judgement while driving.
4) should senior citizens take another road test once at a certain age?
- in my opinion, yes.
Not very important, but logical, most drive very slowly causing many drivers to perform dangerous maneuvers to get around the driver.
reflexes are definitely not as quick
Eyesight not as kean
The dangers of driving at night.
Tuesday, January 15, 2008
genre of "fake news"
As a genre, "fake news" must take current events that are hitting the headlines with full force. While these current events are very important, it is within the "fake news" guidelines that those broadcasters announcing such awareness must use sarcastic tones. Why the sarcastic tone you might ask? Well, as we well know grown ups (or the parent - folk you could say) rely on the local news to feed their ears with wordly notifications. As for the students of adolescents, many think the local news is downright boring and uninteresting. Thus with the "fake news", realistic facts are being brought forth as if nothing should be taken seriously (a stance to "not give a damn"); and with the other shows like "family guy", "south park", and of course the daily show, student - aged viewers love these shows because they're making fun of current events
Side note: Okay so i just went off on a "sarcastic" rant of my own. Thus im going to try and sound more focused: with the genre of "fake news" the newscaster should provide it's audience with real, important current events. But to add a twist, the newscaster should announce such events in a as i said, a "i don't give a damn" tone. As i said above, a lot of the parents or elderly hope to focus in on the local news for their own personal and wordly update. As for us teenagers/young adults, we find local news boring. with the other shows family guy or south park, such shows go to show that the young adult population thrives upon satires of recent main events because it what makes us want to listen. Though there is a satiric twist to certain events, the young adults are still receiving the news. thus, "fake news" is guided towards a younger audience....i hope this statement clears up the charade from above.
THESIS STATEMENTS
1)Due to the dangerous nature of everyday drivers, road rage is a major cause of automobile accidents on our highways.
2)Disney films are presented to inspire and thrive upon a child's imagination not to promote violence.
3) While there are many different species of ants have been found around the world, three specific species are found in America...
4)Families and animal foundations have saved many animals from the streets or from the abuse.
5) Within recent decades, drastic climate changes have caused certain areas around the world to have sustained drought seasons.
6) Stephen King's novel, "The Shining" dazzles his readers with suspenseful writing techniques.
7) Based upon vintage newspapers and the smash - hit movie, "Titanic", it has been made obviously clear that the Titanic did indeed sink in the Atlantic Ocean.
8)From an abundance of research, statistics have shown that America has a drug addiction.
9) The director's selection of actors to potray a true and heroic war tale gives "Saving Private Ryan" a great appriasel.
10) The poignant smells and the constant mess can only preclude that having a rabbit as a house pet is quite the challenge.
11) In order for someone to be presdent, he or she must inhibit leadership qualities such as charisma, compassion, and control.
12) Within a beauty pageant, a woman must perform various "lady - like" tasks in order to be considered the best of the best.
13) In wearing uniforms, students will no longer have to worry about being ridiculed for wearing a particular piece of clothing.
14) From Macbeth, to Hamlet, to The Tempest, students can see the inspiration Shakespeare has upon the current authors of today.
15) From recent research and statistics, many who have had unresolved problems with stress or anxiety have looked to Aromtherapy for relief.
Side note: Okay so i just went off on a "sarcastic" rant of my own. Thus im going to try and sound more focused: with the genre of "fake news" the newscaster should provide it's audience with real, important current events. But to add a twist, the newscaster should announce such events in a as i said, a "i don't give a damn" tone. As i said above, a lot of the parents or elderly hope to focus in on the local news for their own personal and wordly update. As for us teenagers/young adults, we find local news boring. with the other shows family guy or south park, such shows go to show that the young adult population thrives upon satires of recent main events because it what makes us want to listen. Though there is a satiric twist to certain events, the young adults are still receiving the news. thus, "fake news" is guided towards a younger audience....i hope this statement clears up the charade from above.
THESIS STATEMENTS
1)Due to the dangerous nature of everyday drivers, road rage is a major cause of automobile accidents on our highways.
2)Disney films are presented to inspire and thrive upon a child's imagination not to promote violence.
3) While there are many different species of ants have been found around the world, three specific species are found in America...
4)Families and animal foundations have saved many animals from the streets or from the abuse.
5) Within recent decades, drastic climate changes have caused certain areas around the world to have sustained drought seasons.
6) Stephen King's novel, "The Shining" dazzles his readers with suspenseful writing techniques.
7) Based upon vintage newspapers and the smash - hit movie, "Titanic", it has been made obviously clear that the Titanic did indeed sink in the Atlantic Ocean.
8)From an abundance of research, statistics have shown that America has a drug addiction.
9) The director's selection of actors to potray a true and heroic war tale gives "Saving Private Ryan" a great appriasel.
10) The poignant smells and the constant mess can only preclude that having a rabbit as a house pet is quite the challenge.
11) In order for someone to be presdent, he or she must inhibit leadership qualities such as charisma, compassion, and control.
12) Within a beauty pageant, a woman must perform various "lady - like" tasks in order to be considered the best of the best.
13) In wearing uniforms, students will no longer have to worry about being ridiculed for wearing a particular piece of clothing.
14) From Macbeth, to Hamlet, to The Tempest, students can see the inspiration Shakespeare has upon the current authors of today.
15) From recent research and statistics, many who have had unresolved problems with stress or anxiety have looked to Aromtherapy for relief.
Friday, January 11, 2008
purpose, audience, and design in writing
Writing requires different guidelines and aspects: an audience, a purpose, and a design.
Throughout my life, I have used my writing as my own personal, public speaking tool. When it comes to a classroom or public setting, I am certainly not the type of person to voice my opinion aloud. Thus, I use my writing for purpose of expressing my thoughts, feelings, creativity, and opinions. My main purpose is to bring out my loud personality. While my writing purpose is meant to express my true self and my personality, I tend to keep my audience to the same genre.
I tend to keep my audience to the same genre. My writing fixation heads more towards an audience of poetry finatics and colorful, short - story dwellers. In all honesty, I stick to such an audience because I am comfortable and I am confident that this particular audience will apreciate my works. When it comes to showing my knowledge on certain research topics, or trying to persuade an audience to believe something or to not to believe something, etc,etc, I have a tendency to keep in my very "colorful language" instead of getting straight to the point. In that case, i have a problem of allowing myself to lead my audiences into redundant detail which makes them lost and confused. Thus, i need to work on being able to keep my works simple and straight to the point in order for my audiences to understand. Also, I need to work on feeling comfortable in writing for any type of audience i may have to write for in the near future. At this point, it is already apparent as to what design I favor.
When it comes to the design of my writing, I like to lean towards poetry. Poetry allows me to write freely. But when it comes to other designs, I can create a sustaining impact. If I have to adress my opinion, I can bring out attitude (whether is angry or proud) pretty efficiently. The only downfall is that I sometimes let my opinion take over and I forget why i am supporting my stance. I do the same thing in comparison papers. If i agree more with the pro or the con, I tend to focus too heavily on one or the other. In that case, it is important to keep the audience, the purpose, and the design at a state of equillibrium.
The audience, the purpose, and the design are three crutial components to all formations of writing.
Throughout my life, I have used my writing as my own personal, public speaking tool. When it comes to a classroom or public setting, I am certainly not the type of person to voice my opinion aloud. Thus, I use my writing for purpose of expressing my thoughts, feelings, creativity, and opinions. My main purpose is to bring out my loud personality. While my writing purpose is meant to express my true self and my personality, I tend to keep my audience to the same genre.
I tend to keep my audience to the same genre. My writing fixation heads more towards an audience of poetry finatics and colorful, short - story dwellers. In all honesty, I stick to such an audience because I am comfortable and I am confident that this particular audience will apreciate my works. When it comes to showing my knowledge on certain research topics, or trying to persuade an audience to believe something or to not to believe something, etc,etc, I have a tendency to keep in my very "colorful language" instead of getting straight to the point. In that case, i have a problem of allowing myself to lead my audiences into redundant detail which makes them lost and confused. Thus, i need to work on being able to keep my works simple and straight to the point in order for my audiences to understand. Also, I need to work on feeling comfortable in writing for any type of audience i may have to write for in the near future. At this point, it is already apparent as to what design I favor.
When it comes to the design of my writing, I like to lean towards poetry. Poetry allows me to write freely. But when it comes to other designs, I can create a sustaining impact. If I have to adress my opinion, I can bring out attitude (whether is angry or proud) pretty efficiently. The only downfall is that I sometimes let my opinion take over and I forget why i am supporting my stance. I do the same thing in comparison papers. If i agree more with the pro or the con, I tend to focus too heavily on one or the other. In that case, it is important to keep the audience, the purpose, and the design at a state of equillibrium.
The audience, the purpose, and the design are three crutial components to all formations of writing.
Tuesday, January 8, 2008
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