Question 2: assessment activity

I will be using my subculture paper as the prime example for this particular question.

For this paper, it was my mission to interpret my own definition of a subculture within our American society and i chose to talk about band geeks. The language i used was that of a sarcastic or "kinda poking fun" type of matter. A nice example would have to be the quote that created to match the illustration in which i used for this paper, "These band geeks live, eat, sleep, and could possibly die along side their instruments" Obviously, "...could possibly die along side their instruments" is a hyperbole but is based upon good terms in order to describe to people who not as familiar with the term "band geek" as i shamefully am.

On terms of describing my definition of band geek, i think i did very well. Without just rambling on about my own personal opinions about band geeks, i used my firsthand experience being in marching band for four years as a way to support my facts. Plus, i the color of my language helped as well.

My use of tone for this paper is quite comedic and very informal - like your typical high school newspaper submission. I believe that my style of language helped create many vivid images within the reader's head - enough so that the reader could get the main point of my definition.

In organizing the text, i organized my paragraphs of this particular paper the same as I do all my other papers: least important details first then slowly make it to the important facts at the end - it's always important to have a strong ending. As for my topic sentences, i just tried to include all the main points within a particular paragraph. I personally think my thesis statement is pretty good: "Band geeks are musically talented people within tight knit, social groups who have a vast variety of personalities spoken through distinct fashionable trends.

In general, as a definition paper it is up to the writer to make his own clear defintion because the audience he may be writing to may not know anything or may know everything about a particular topic so its up to the writer to provide enough background information and strong facts etc, etc.