Paraphrasing/ Peer Reviewing Responses

Topic: Banning of cell phone use while operating a vehicle
Title of Article: Cell phone safety concerns prompt legislative proposals.

Paraphrased Summary:

According to The National Highway Traffic Safety Administration, the cause of almost 30% of recent accidents have been the constant driver's use of cell phones while driving(Martin 15). In fact, Senator John Corzine and Representative Gary Ackerman have proposed for a specific law against cell phone use. Particularly both Corzine and Ackerman want to "...ban the use of hand - held cell phones while driving." (Martin 15). In that case, as long as drivers are being technologically assisted by a bluetooth, an earpiece , or a speaker phone, the drvers will not be charged. Thus, the driver can only answer the phone if the car is not moving and the phone can only work through voice activiation. According to recent studies, drivers that are provided with hands - free cell phones provide themselves with more safety. According to the University of North Carolina's "final results" of their recent study, out of the 32,000 accidents that have been recorded, wireless phones have been the cause of less than 2% of the accidents while objects interfering with one's own driving (a cell phone) caused 29.4% of the accidents ( Martin 16).

RESPONSE:

For drivers to only be able to talk while driving with an earpiece or through voice activation is great a idea. The fact that this can only operate for when the vehicle has stopped is an even better predicament. From U of NC's recent study, 32,000 accidents is more than a reliable amount to receive accurate and plausible data. The fact that only 2% of the 32,000 accidents were caused by wireless devices is remarkable! Thus, i am all for such a legislation.

POTENTIAL IDEAS:

I could look at the other more common causes of most of the automobile accidnets in this country. I could look from the other point of view in which we need cell phones in case of an emergency or that cell phones are not even close to being the leading factor in accidents:radio, eating, looking for something under the seat. I could also look into the fatality rate when cell phones are the cause for the accident. I will look into the states that already have a law against cell phone use under the operation of a vehicle.

PEER REVIEW RESPONSES:

1) I believe that peer viewing should be open because i believe it's nice idea to know as to whom is viewing your work. Thus, if you happen to like what that particular person has said on various occasions, then one could ask that person for advice or for his or her opinion.

2)When it comes to grammar and punctuation, that should only be needed if there are serious occurences. Besides the serious occurences, the reviewer can just make simple corrections. I believe that the main focus should be on the genre of a works and how it's structured. Once the structure is all figured out, then the simplicity of grammar and mechanics can be factored in.

3)Finally, i believe that students should be able to write about topics of their choice. Being able to choose topics gives the writer a chance write strongly on a topic he or she is interested in. When a writer has an interest in a topic, he or she will do a better job in presenting presenting him/herself. Unless, it's done at the last minute....har har.